Tuesday, February 12, 2008

The Condemned

People gathered round
Waiting for the sound
The sound that will mark a man's doom
His face is filled with gloom
His eyes filled with tears
His mind revolves with thoughts
He breathes every air greedily
Because every second is precious
He accepts his fate
With arms wide open
He wished he had a better life
He sought for that second chance
That couldn't be found.

I looked at him with pity
His heart must be ready for what lies ahead
He didn't have much time on earth
He wanted to make it right at the last minute
He wanted to find solace in eternity
His sins were unforgivable to man
I didn't want to be in his shoes
I wish he had another shot at life
His heartbeat synchronized with every second
His mind was fixed on his eternity
He spoke in a soft tone.
He didn't want us to ply his route
He was a condemned man.

That day my life was changed
I vowed to be a better man
To use what I have when I still have it
He lost possession of his life
But his words rang a bell in my heart
It established an unquenchable thirst for righteousness
I knew he was a messenger.

May his soul rest in peace


lindwee said...

Poor man!
The condemners shall be condemned.

Afrobabe said...

wow...strong words and kinda dark for vals....

Today's ranting said...

awwww so sad, no one would want to be in his shoes.

LurLar said...

Strong words...pple love to condemn pple,but noone wants to be condemn. Thnks for stopping by my blog. Happy valentine's day!

Rinsola said...

Quite deep.

Olamild said...

" He wanted to make it right at the last minuteHe wanted to find solace in eternity.....................

To use what I have when I still have it"

I really liked that part
Could u write a love poem for today?

yayi said...

Behold...My Redeemer Liveth!!!

anonymous gal said...

good lawd...

genial said...

Interesting. You could very well have been writing about Christ, you know. Your first few stanzas do not fit with this hypothesis, however, because he had no regrets at his death.

However, if we ignore nuch of the first stanza, we could carry this flight of fancy even further. He was a condemned man... his sins unforgivable to man - which is why he was condemned in the first place. No one is condemned to die (by man) if his crime is forgivable.

Yes,he lost possession of his life, but he picked it up again.

Interesting perspective, as though watching from the sidelines at the scene of the crucifixion.

Sasuke said...

men you suppose write poetic book or something like that.. you've got skills bro..nice work

Jaycee said...

"It established an unquenchable thirst for righteousness. I knew he was a messenger"


uNWrItten* said...

haven't been here in a while..very interesting poem..i like it..

Olamild said...


Life said...

so sad !

I want to look love through your words.

your words and writting is so strong.

Take Care

Oracle said...

Sorry I've not been around for some time. I'm gonna be away for much longer, this year is very hectic for me. I've got loads of schoolwork, still tryna get into college.

I won't update for a while.
Love you all.

Black Man Comes said...

snap dude, anyway, u need to compile a book fast man. like 2 yrs ago.

Allied said...


We miss u oh

1stpet2v9 said...

very strong combinations

Sparkle said...

been a while...how u been?

Olamild said...

Please update now

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